“I’m going with my parents to meet the girl they want me to marry.” he said. Sheila’s head reeled. Wasn’t she the girl he wanted to marry? Hadn’t he told her that she was his soul-mate? She ranted, she raved, she pleaded but he went anyway. He met the girl and a few weeks later he married her. Sheila was heart-broken. She had lost her best friend and the man she thought was her partner for life. “Perhaps, I’m not good enough for him,” she thought.
Years later, she knows the truth. She was too good for him.
Inspired by Dawn Storey of Alphabet Salad, I’m undertaking an attempt at short fiction writing. 100 words – no more, no less.
In keeping with the theme of Everyday Gyaan, I will also try to make sure that the fiction is something that attempts to inspire. I would love to hear what you think of my first attempt. Be honest now 😉
May you be inspired – every day!
Too good.
Thanks, Janaki.
I didn’t get it. 🙁
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I’m sorry you didn’t, Magali. It’s just a story of rejection and lack of self-esteem and then finding one’s worth again.
You don’t have to apologize, Corrine! I’m a little slow sometimes… it makes sense now.
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Glad it does, Magali. Am I see you next Sunday? 🙂
Yes Corrine, will be there with mom. See you then. 🙂
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Look forward to meeting you both, Magali.
honestly… it is fabulous! I want to know MORE…. loved it. I think no mater what the subject is, it will be in line with Everyday Gyaan… because after all to think, feel, anticipate or to believe is to be inspired or inspires! It is one of the things I love about reading… about fiction ~it evokes emotion and thought! Now you’ve got me wondering what happened to him? what happened to her?
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Thank you so much, Amy. Your comments always make my day. I love fiction too, but never ventured to write it. Now I’m trying it in small doses and it’s getting addictive. I think I’ll continue this story some day.
Fabulous!!! loved it.
Heartbreaking, yet empowering! Thanks for sharing this, Corinne – and I’m glad I inspired you to tackle 100 Words! Looking forward to your further gems. 🙂
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Thanks, Dawn. I can see this getting addictive for me!
Naiiiiiiiceee… I like it, Corinne..
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Thanks so much, Punam.
It was a brilliant attempt and it has left me asking for more. I was like No….it cannot just get over so soon. I want to read more…. and I am already imagining various possibilities that could have happened 🙂
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Thank you, Privy. I hope to write more of this story in time. Meanwhile, there’ll be others!
Wow! Following such a tight formula isn’t easy, but you’ve done a brilliant job here, Corinne. What a great story! <3
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Actually the one crib that my English Litt teacher had was that I write too briefly, Martha. So I guess it’s easier for me. Thank you for your encouragement. It means a lot coming from an excellent story-teller like you.
Agreed with everyone else…100 words is hard, and you did a great job! It did leave me wanting more, though 🙂
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And more will come in time, Brynne. Thank you.
Excellent.
I would like to suggest that replacing ‘knows the truth’ with realises, but then again, this is also a character statement, and those two options point towards quite different characters, so I guess it depends on your intention – but isn’t it amazing how just a few words can do that. 🙂
Keep going!
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Thanks so much, Claire. I think ‘realizes’ would indeed have been a better option. I appreciate your feedback.
I realized that 100 words is too short but if your theme is as good as yours, then it could create waves and impact. Loved it BS 🙂
I would like to continue this story someday, Melissa. It was just a start. Glad you liked it.
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I love it, Corinne! I wish it was 10,o00 words, because I’d love to hear more of the details. It drew me in.
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All of you are encouraging me to continue this story, Jimi Ann and I hope to in the near future. Till then you’ll have to suffer my other offerings 😉
a few more years (or decades…) later i bet she realizes that neither one is better than the other, they simply weren’t right for each other. i think sometimes we need to experience extreme swings in judgement before finally settling somewhere in the middle ;-*
you captured an amazing amount of meaning in very few words — well done!
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Perhaps she hasn’t got there yet, Linda 😉 Glad you liked it though.
Corinne Rodrigues:
Thank you, Amy, Linda, Privy and Melissa. ♥
Absolutely right, she was too good for him. Great story idea, love it.
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Thanks, Sulekha. This one I’ll continue. 🙂
Corinne, you painted such a vivid picture in so few words. I see the one left behind, her love tossed in the trash like an empty pizza box. She’s full of the intimate times spent with this man. How could he leave? She’s hurt and angry, her world has been rocked. He obediently rides off into the sunset to marry a stranger. He’s turned his back on himself—his life, and the woman who truly loves him. The reader sees much more than 100 words here. Well done!
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Oh, Leah now you’ve gone and done my next 100 words 😉 Just kidding, you captured it so well.
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This is a perfect story Corrine. I loved it. I should have read that 16 years ago 🙁
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This is really good Corinne. I like that you were able to tell a little story, but infuse an important message into it. You’re a clever thinker.
I like flash fiction. I tend to write brief, concise stories. That’s sort of how I communicate verbally too I think. I’m glad it’s an accepted art form now.
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Thank you, Myrna. You do flash fiction so well. I’m so enjoying this – it’s kind of addictive!
It was great. Said it all in a very concise way. Wish I could do as well, but I do my best and thats important to me. Great work
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Thank you, Sondra. Doing our best is what matters the most! ♥
I agree with others–this is fabulous. In so few words you captured a great story and a deep self revelation. Terrific!
Thanks, Galen. I’m hoping to continue the story soon.
As the Aussies say – Good onya mate. I was disappointed when I read the last bit. I wanted to know how and why she reached that conclusion. So you see your mini story gripped my attention. Sign of a good story! More stories welcome.
Thanks so much, Leila. I guess I’ll have to fill up all the parts in between sometime later. For now, I’ll stick to my 100 words – my first attempt at fiction. I’m anywhere are good as you are at writing – now I hope you got that not so subtle hint!
I didn’t read all the comments, just the story, just so you know. I loved the story, I know nothing of writing so I can’t critic your style or wrongs and rights, I just loved the story….<3 Sad and triumphant, perfect. all in 100 words.
Jan, I’m glad that this story touched you. I’m writing to touch and not to impress. Love you ♥
loved it. Loved all the other 100 words too. it has inspired me to write at least a page everyday again.
Thanks, Sunita. I’m glad I inspired you. I hope I can get to see your writing – do share.
Hello Corinne
This is my first visit to your blog, and the first thing that i liked ( loved ) about your blog is the name itself (Everyday Gyaan). Being an Indian, i am really felt good and overjoyed. Nice to see some foreigner getting inspired by Sanskrit. Next comes the concept- 100 words! Really great! Awesome ! Well let me go through the other articles in your blog.
Sanjib
Hi Sanjib – Thanks for dropping by. I’m glad you liked Everyday Gyaan. However, I must tell you I’m 100% ‘desi’!
Haha 🙂 You have awesome grasp over Hindi!! Desi girl.!! have you visited India anytime?
Perhaps you have read my ‘About’ page, Sanjib 🙂
Oh Corine!! i missed that !!! You are real desi!!! (Ye janke bohat acchha laga) Its really nice to know that!!
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too good !!! 100 words can do wonders !
you have great talent
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